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These are the four teensy (two are haiku) things I wrote for [ profile] hdotp's Comment Meme! I'm posting them all here, but please read and comment only one what you want to -- I seriously will not be offended if you like one haiku and don't care for the rest, for instance. I just wanted these here on my journal, and it feels weird to do four separate posts, when the longest thing here is 150 words. ;-)

So partake as you will, enjoy, and follow the username link to get to the Meme itself and see all the pretty things people made. (The Harry Blanket art by [ profile] dustmouth is my very favorite and I seriously need to properly rec it, because OMG<3333!)

Title: Thirst
Rating: PG

for me, he hungers.
it's easy: all want, not need.
but I, for him, thirst.

Title: his wings
Rating: PG-13

fleck of dirt on tufts
weightless as sunrise. beckoned,
i touch, i defile.

Rating: R
Words: 100
Content: handjob

"Look at how you weep for it," Harry whispered, and Draco sagged back against his body. "Keep your eyes open," he admonished when Draco's lashes fluttered.

Harry's rough palm cradled Draco's cock, his fingers moving gentle over the head with every slow tug. Draco's trousers were barely shoved down, his shirt drawn up so that they both could watch the desperate breaths he took.

Harry reached forward and wiped the shower steam off the mirror again, and with the next sure squeeze of Harry's fist, Draco found Harry's sharp gaze in their reflection and came all over the slick glass.

Title: Not Now, H-h--Potter
Rating: NC-17
Words: 150
Content: anal sex

"Leave them on," Draco panted. Yeah, he knocked into them when they kissed, but bloody hell, they were to the shagging part, and Draco was in there, and he was close even, and there's Potter trying to wrangle his glasses off his face mid-fuck, and come on, you know?

"But…they're…" Potter tried.

"Shut it, I'm coming," Draco sighed.

"Oh," Potter said. And thank bloody Merlin he left off the glasses and rested his hands on Draco's pounding hips instead.

"Christ, Harry," Draco grit out as he spilled deep.

Potter gave him one of those ridiculous smiles that meant Draco had fucking said his name again.


Draco, still panting, rolled his eyes and leaned down. Potter's smile became a gasp as Draco's cock pushed all the way in with the motion. Then Draco tilted his head, knocked into the glasses only once, and then sealed their mouths in a kiss.

Thank you for reading! <3

Date: 2014-03-22 11:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Oh,how gorgeous! Every one of them! I loved the first haiku so much, and the last drabble was perfect, but so were the other two. Beautiful, bebé. <3!
Edited Date: 2014-03-22 11:31 pm (UTC)

Date: 2014-03-22 11:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thanks so much! :-D

Date: 2014-03-23 09:26 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] eidheann_writes
oh god that first haiku... (And I don't really usually LIKE haiku) but damn...

Date: 2014-03-23 05:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you so much!!!

Date: 2014-03-23 10:17 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] birdsofshore
Aaaargh! I'd missed the wings haiku! Now you have me wondering what else I missed over there. Look at your verbs, again! I want a mutual verb-appreciations society ;-)

[ profile] dustmouth is soooooo super amazing. It's always such a lovely surprise when she gifts us with some H/D <3

Date: 2014-03-23 05:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Defile, right? It's a great word. :-9

And yeah, that art just made me clutch at my chest with happiness!

Thanks, Birds!!!
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Date: 2014-03-23 05:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you!!! I'm sorry for the painful part, though! I sort of think of it as an unreliable narrator situation in that respect.

Date: 2014-03-23 06:30 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] firethesound
1. This is easily my favorite haiku I've ever read. Ever. Just, I have no idea how you managed to pack so much feeling, emotion, EVERYTHING into just seventeen syllables. The comparison of hunger vs. thirst is just brilliant.

2. More haiku love. Mad love for your diction in this.

3. akldjhfkjahdsfkj Really, just. This. Ridiculously hot. The mirror. Making him keep his eyes open. Their eyes meeting at the very end. ::flails:: And this little drabble captures so much. This is, like, a perfect example for how you write. Your writing is like a spring, all coiled up nice and tight into a perfect 100 words. But if I poke at it even a little, it explodes all over the place and unspools and there's just so much more to it. This is just a little snippet of sex, but I get such a sense of the whole relationship, their personalities, the way they are together. Just, everything.

4. Glasses!! Glasses glasses glasses!!! This: "and there's Potter trying to wrangle his glasses off his face mid-fuck, and come on, you know?" was just PERFECT. I love that mid-shag getting his glasses off is something Potter's trying to do, and how annoyed by it Draco is because he wants those glasses on. And then he says Harry, and Potter's so pleased by it, and just. I can't.

I'm always amazed by how much you're able to pack into your writing, and how you're able to tell so much with even the smallest little smutty drabble. My own writing sprawls all over the place and I've never been able to write anything this short, so I really appreciate when other people do, and especially when they do it so well.

Date: 2014-03-23 07:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]

You write the best dang comments! THANK YOU!!!

Also, being that your writing is so stellar, no one's complaining about the amount of words from you. LOL! I've had to learn to write longer stories. I got my start in writing as a poet, so what all you've seen of me writing stories has had to grow from that. I always thought telling a story was someone else's job -- someone who could do it better than me. I got into writing first and foremost to play with language, and that's what I love about poetry and flash fiction and all that. I've gained a true love for story-writing, though, over the years, and now I love that just as much.


Date: 2014-03-24 04:54 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Aghhh I love these. How do you write such good sex???

Date: 2014-03-26 01:01 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Is that rhetorical? LOL! If not, I guess I've just been writing it for so long, I've gotten to know what I like and what I don't. *shrugs*

Date: 2014-03-24 09:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
You are making my blush red all over ;) <3

Your drabbles are so good! I can't even begin to fathom how you can set a scene with so few words, and you just managed to catch a certain feeling in both of them.
And your haikus are brilliant too, I am so unfamiliar with them, but I know how many rules there are in writing them. You managed to make something so poignant, especially "his wings".

Date: 2014-03-26 01:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
Thank you!!!

The only hard and fast rules of haiku that I know of are the syllables. 5-7-5 (by line).

An unwritten rule is that the best haiku take something from the first two lines and somehow reverse it or blow them apart or blow your mind about everything. I haven't ever been able to achieve that like I want, but when I see the masters do's amazing.

And your art was so amazing! SO AMAZING. I just love it.


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